After cutting down all my clips in the last edit to make sure they are all fast and fit under 15 seconds, I have decided to make fine adjustments to the clips. After watching my last edit repeatedly a lot of the shots felt too brief and the pacing was all wrong. I realised part of this was due to the speed of the activity in the shot. They felt too brief not because of the 12 frame duration but because not enough of the process was shown in that time to be clear so I sped up the clips from 100% speed to 120%, 150%, 180% or 200% depending on what worked best. I also shortened some of the longer clips to make other clips slightly longer and vary the pace more over the clip.
Based on some feedback I cut back on the yawning sequence, and spotted a continuity error with rubbing the eyes. The clip is cut between yawning shots but his hands were still on his eyes when it cuts back to the yawning but his hands are not in sight so I sped the clip up, shortened it then duplicated and reversed it. Placing them side by side it makes it look as though he has completed the action. I was originally considering making a jump cut but I think it looks better this way. It is so fast that you cannot tell it is reversed.
I also increased the length of the walking in doorway, opening bathroom door, the toilet flushing and the ending. I made a lot of room by cutting back on my initial shot and the toothpaste shot which were the longest parts of the sequences. This has made everything felt more tightly cut and improved the pacing considerably.
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